Jane Eyre
Hey! My name is Angela Duelli. I live in the Victorian period and I’m a poor young girl. My best friends are Rose and Mrs. Herbert, together we are a pickpocket gang.
One cold day Rose and I took a walk, but I forgot my coat. We didn’t go back to get it because we thought we could steal something. Suddenly we saw a desperate woman lying on the ground. As soon as we ran to her, we tried to speak with her but she was at the end of her nerves and didn’t notice us. She had a precious coat over her arm, so we used this moment and stole it. As I put it on, I recognized that it was a coat from a man. A little while later the woman asked,”What are you doing?” Rose and I were terrified and asked stupidly, ”Can we take this coat?”
I thought if she says “no” I would run away!
To my amazement she said, ”Never mind! As long as you find a way how I can get away from here.”
“That can be done. What is your name? Do you have money?”
“Jane Eyre. Yes.”
I heard wheels and I saw a coach coming along. I stopped it and asked to be taken as far as the woman’s pound would pay for. The inside was empty. I helped her to enter and the coach rolled on its way.
Afterwards Rose and I spoke about Jane Eyre. Rose thought that she was Mr. Rochester’s fiancée, but I could not believe that. When I put my hand into the coat-pocket I felt something hard. I pulled it out and I saw jewels!!
Changes in the book:
Chapter 31 Flight
… It was soon after midnight that I rose and, taking nothing except my money and by mistake Mr. Rochester’s coat. …
Explication: Mr. Rochester put his jewels which he wanted to give to Jane in his coat and forgot it there.
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1 comment:
str: You must link sentences properly or use a full stop: My best girlfriends .... Together we are ..(1)
exp: "As soon as we ran to her, we tried to speak with her" = Sobald wir zu ihr rannten, versuchten wir ... - As soon as we reached her, we tried to .... (2)
exp: "she was at the end of her nerves" --> Germanism (3)
t: said (2)
exp: saw a coach coming towards us. (1) (come along = mitkommen, begleiten)
exp: the coach rolled along on its way (1)
C? "asked to be taken as far as the woman’s pound would pay for." --> Here Angela would go on the coach. I asked them to take Jane as far as her money would take her. (2)
The story is ok, but it's a bit strange that they're a pickpocket gang and get afraid when a helpless woman asks them what they're doing with a coat. It doesn't really make sense.
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